Friday, May 22, 2009

"Moving" by Ben

Moving
by Ben
“Philip catch the ball,”said Mitch. He turned around and caught it and started laughing. “I hope you don’t move forver!”
“Ting! Time to get up!” I got out of my bed, threw on my clothes, ran down stairs and eat breakfast and went to school. Mitch told me that he really was moving away.
“Oh you are…dang!” “See ya…”
When I got home I told my mom that Mitch was moving to Australia “Aah, do you want go to Southdale?”
The next day
“Ting! Time to get up!”
“I don’t want to go to school. I will be made fun of!” Philip said.
“I’m sure you will be fine,” his mom said, “I’m sure you will be fine.” When he gets to school people are chanting “You don’t have a friend to play with ha! Ha!”
“I do have a friend to play with he’s coming back in a few days.” I said.
“Ting!” He walks home and tells his mom that he got made fun of. Mom says she is sorry for him and wants to take him to a video arcade.
“I went to the arcade and guess what? I met a kid named Phil… “moved here from Canada. He goes to my school and he is in my class now wont be made fun of.”

2 comments:

  1. I liked the plot, how Philip is sad because he is losing his friend but then he meets a new one.

    How old are Mitch and Philip?

    Maybe you could show a little more, tell about the games Philip played. Just a thought.

    ~Skye

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  2. T like the story

    A Is phil nice

    G tell were they are a litte more

    - Jack G.

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